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Feedback on essay: Insightful and well written. Excellent development of a thesis. See comments. 8.5/10 Feedback: Metaphor in 12-word is highly effective. Revisit your verbs in the micro-story. Ender's Game: Not all questions completed - what has been done is excellent. 6/10 The Knife: Very clever but you have been careless with punctuation. See comments. The idea is sophisticated! 8/10 The boy was lyrically written with only minor errors. I could easily picture the child. 10/10 The Box has too many errors; especially the lack of paragraphing and the mundaner ending. Not your usual brilliance! The poem is very confronting with powerful use of metaphor and imagery. 9/10