Harry+Rogers

Cleverly constructed with the choices reflecting moral choices and values. The comment about 'hopping into bed' is a little out of keeping with the tone and genre. You certainly challenge the reader's assumptions through your choice of characters! Your use of imagery and verbs is sophisticated and skilful. 9.5/10 See comments on the poem
 * [[file:No 'e' and 12 word stories.docx]]
 * Feedback: 50 word: Powerfully evocative. The last line is excellent. 12 word: Effective use of sibilance. Play with the adjective earnest.
 * [[file:Adversity+Story.docx]]
 * Feedback: See comments on this outstanding narrative.
 * [[file:What's+in+the+BoxHRogers.docx]]
 * See comments on this punchy narrative! 9/10
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